Once upon a time there was a lion and an owner. The owner
had gotten the lion when he was just a cub. He rescued him from being killed
because the cub’s mom could not take care of him any longer. The owner fed him
bottles, taught him how to eat on his own, a few simple tricks, bought him all
the cool toys, and even made him his own sanctuary in his back yard. The owner
would do anything and everything for the cub.
Once the cub got older, the two would do everything together.
The owner would bring the lion on trips with him, walk him in the neighborhood,
and even had parties for him. They were the best of friends.
The lion would help the owner around the house and in the
yard. The lion would help him pick all the weeds, help pick up leaves and
sticks, pick out pretty flowers, and would even water the yard and garden. The
owner even let the lion come inside of his house. The lion would watch television
with his owner and help him with basic chores around the house each week.
One day the lion and the owner were out in the backyard.
They were prepping the yard to get it ready for spring and their annual spring
cook out. They were both so happy and excited about the cookout. The weather
was gorgeous and winter seemed to be long gone.
As the day went on, the two got a lot done. Planted new
flowers, racked leaves, bought new outdoor furniture, and even some lawn
ornaments. However, they noticed that is was starting to get super windy.
Before they knew it, the nice hot shinning sun was covered by grey boring
clouds. The temperature in the air turned from warm to chilly.
There was a cold front that blew in. That night they ended
up getting snow! Therefore, the next morning the lion and the owner had to
bring everything that was outside to the garage. This was to save the flowers
and the furniture from weathering before their perfect party.
Just as the two were moving a piece of the heavy furniture,
the lion noticed something. There was a bee coming near his owner. The lion was
so grateful for his owner and knew that his owner was highly allergic to bees.
So, the lion dropped the furniture to stop the bee from getting to his owner.
However, the furniture landed right on the owner’s foot. He ended up breaking
his foot, but the lion killed the bee before it got to his owner.
"It is better to have a wise enemy than a foolish friend."
Author's Note:
The original story is about a gardener and a bear. The gardener was really nice to the bear and feed him food. The bear then fanned away the files while the gardener took a nap. There was one that would not go away, and the bear got very angry. The bear then threw a stone at the fly, but it hit the gardener as well. In the end, both the fly and the gardener die. The theme of the story was "
It is better to have a wise enemy than a foolish friend."
I wanted to change the characters and add a different story line. Also, I did not want one of the main characters to die in the end after being so nice.
Bibliography:
The Bear and The Gardener
This story is part of the Bidpai unit. Story source: The Tortoise and the Geese and Other Fables of Bidpai by Maude Barrows Dutton, with illustrations by E. Boyd Smith, 1908.
Mary, you did a great job at describing the life of the lion and his owner. From watering the ground to enjoying parties together, the two really sounded like the best of buds. I wonder how the lion picked the weeds out of the ground. However he accomplished this feat, the lion is a true creative thinker! As I continued to read the story, I was really curious if the plot would have a turn for the worse, but instead there was a lesson at the end. The quote was very soothing. It felt peaceful and wise.
ReplyDeleteWhen I think back to a few of your older storytelling posts, I remember a theme of best friends (usually with animals haha).
You did a great job at making the story flow. There wasn’t one time that I had to re-read a paragraph to better understand it. The story was simple, lovable and it taught a moral lesson.
You did a nice job at describing the original story in your “Author’s Note” section. I see the similarities and differences in the two stories.
I'm glad that you made it so the main characters did not die. Honestly, I would rather a broken foot than an allergic (possibly deadly) reaction to a bee sting. I like how you show the character of the lion. You made his character more alive and I got a great picture of a lion working next to a man while they were tending a garden. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story. I am also glad that you did not have the main character die. I hate when that happens. It was also nice how you described the interactions between the two main characters. You could get a good sense of how close they actually were. I also love the picture that you found. That is adorable. Overall, I liked your story and I found it easy to read.
ReplyDeleteI loved your idea of changing up the story to feature a lion and owner rather than the original bear and gardener. It actually reminds me a lot of the owner of GW Exotic Zoo just south of Norman. Have you ever been there? The guy who owns it has a sanctuary in his "backyard" with lions, tigers, and all kinds of crazy animals. The owner in your story instantly reminded me of that! Great job overall!
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